i'm not sure i like the flavor text, it is pretty cool but something melting all over me doesnt make me feel particularly frightened.
cripple was also suboptimal, it doesnt seem like a black thing to do, and it's just anticlimactic. A rewrite could make it fit the idea of crippling someone much more unique, but if it's able to kill you, shouldnt it? plus it could use your corpse for it's army. seems like a missed opportunity fo blacc
actually on further inspection i suppose 2 mana to kill a 3-power creature isnt out of the question. it may be good to play it safe and add a tap symbol. actually i'd make that a must no matter what cost-power ratios you change. it would basically double as instant removal on a creature, which isn't found often at all in red or black i dont believe
The +2 has enough words to fill a card all by itself. Which is BONKERS. It's a key red ability, +sacc at eot.
(Which, um, is rather too good; suggest taking out the sacc to make you at least slightly work for it?)
The -4 is presumably the mainly black ability - but that shouldn't be allowed to hit enchantments. Those are supposed to be 's main weakness.
I would suggest making the -10 flat "Control target player's next turn" - simpler, and still game winning while not grindy if for some reason it's insufficient.
That +2 looks way too powerful. It's a "destroy target creature" but with a lot of upsides. To put it into a perspective, Ob Nixilis Reignited is a 5 CMC walker that has that kind of ability option at the cost of -2 loyalty
In this card case, I would put that +2 ability at -3 and come up with a new kind of choice for that -4. The -4 as it stands has its own problem as well. The pair isn't supposed to be able to remove enchantments.
this is much better, this means it can't just tap out to avoid being destroyed. Also if it had vigilance it couldn't tap itself to avoid damage as a last resort
Seems solid. though the exact cost-power might be a bit off.
See my comment on Crippler
i'm not sure i like the flavor text, it is pretty cool but something melting all over me doesnt make me feel particularly frightened.
cripple was also suboptimal, it doesnt seem like a black thing to do, and it's just anticlimactic. A rewrite could make it fit the idea of crippling someone much more unique, but if it's able to kill you, shouldnt it? plus it could use your corpse for it's army. seems like a missed opportunity fo blacc
i beg you to fix this capitalization!
-3-3 is not give out this easily.
actually on further inspection i suppose 2 mana to kill a 3-power creature isnt out of the question. it may be good to play it safe and add a tap symbol. actually i'd make that a must no matter what cost-power ratios you change. it would basically double as instant removal on a creature, which isn't found often at all in red or black i dont believe
flavor god!
This is very limiting and mediocre in efficiency, I like the flavor and design but those are two small tidbits
Very cool design!
does she have avatars or something? that's neat.
he returns!
fix
Just dropping in to add a few things, can't say when I'll be back. I want to complete this set a lot, and I know it can be good.
I have been gone due to lack of ideas, but I am going to try to make some new designs here.
:)
I like this one, is it okay?
just one card
:( ok, i will change it.
The +2 has enough words to fill a card all by itself. Which is BONKERS. It's a key red ability, +sacc at eot. (Which, um, is rather too good; suggest taking out the sacc to make you at least slightly work for it?)
The -4 is presumably the mainly black ability - but that shouldn't be allowed to hit enchantments. Those are supposed to be
's main weakness.
I would suggest making the -10 flat "Control target player's next turn" - simpler, and still game winning while not grindy if for some reason it's insufficient.
That ultimate doesn't sound fun to me. It sounds like a win more ultimate that takes away the other players agency.
That +2 looks way too powerful. It's a "destroy target creature" but with a lot of upsides. To put it into a perspective, Ob Nixilis Reignited is a 5 CMC walker that has that kind of ability option at the cost of -2 loyalty
In this card case, I would put that +2 ability at -3 and come up with a new kind of choice for that -4. The -4 as it stands has its own problem as well. The
pair isn't supposed to be able to remove enchantments.
how'd that get there? lol thx
There is also a comma in the name that should be removed
this is much better, this means it can't just tap out to avoid being destroyed. Also if it had vigilance it couldn't tap itself to avoid damage as a last resort
similar to Ojutai Exemplars, but focusing on dudes not spells