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CardName: Maiden of the Day-Star Cost: 3RR Type: Enchantment Creature - Spirit Pow/Tgh: 3/3 Rules Text: Distinguished (This creature is legendary if no other permanent has the same name.) Legendary red creatures you control have "{T}: This creature deals 1 damage to target creature or player." Flavour Text: She was as a naked flame, terrible in the fullness of her splendour. Set/Rarity: Silmarillion: The War of the Jewels Uncommon
Maiden of the Day-Star
  Distinguished (This creature is legendary if no other permanent has the same name.)
Legendary red creatures you control have "  : This creature deals 1 damage to target creature or player."She was as a naked flame, terrible in the fullness of her splendour.
Illus. Alexandra Khitrova
3/3
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This doesn't seem to kill any of the red distinguished creatures you have and just makes Child of Melkor ping you and your opponent for an extra point. Is this intentional?
The "pings itself" is something of a leftover since the original design wayy back chanted instead - hence it limited the amount of burning by the size of the creature. Here though, it doesn't really add anything to the card.
I'll probably remove it at some point.
"All my creatures are tim" is scary. It could do with a time delay before going live, maybe?
"Time delay"? Of what kind?
I assume he means a delay from when you play it to from when your creatures actually get the ability. However, the restriction is fairly limiting in this case and Lightning Volley exists (though it only lasts for a turn), so I think as a design it isn't too bad. I am not sure the design is quite what red wants in this set, though.
New art,
2/2 -> 
3/3 and the granted ability no longer damages the creature itself. Also shortened the flavor text.
This seems fine.