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Thanks for the help.
I like the design here.
No, proper templating doesn't use "their". It's controversial whether that's incorrect or not, but Magic templating avoids that controversy by always saying "his or her".
yeah change 2nd "he or she" to "that player" and third & fourth "he or she" to "their" to cut down the wordcount. True it only cuts it from 35 to 31 (you left "or her" off the last instance of it) but each word saved is good.
Looks perfect to me. (Apart from the misplaced apostrophe.) You could make the second "he or she" instead read "that player", but either works.
I'm not sure about the templating here.
Thanks for the development and templating help. But now I have my doubts about this card. I don't want to recall plow under, and I feel like the word 'misinstantiate' should only target one permanent.
Cool, that's handy. In the end, though, I'd say Thalys needs a shorter name. As it is, his title is pretty scrunched.
FWIW, Whiplash Trap could bounce two permanents for 5 mana with the option to make it 1 mana. Plow Under could put two permanents on top of a library for 5 mana (although it was very obnoxious). So this could probably be six mana.
I think the wording would more usually be phrased as "Tap target permanent. Return target permanent to its owner's hand. Put target permanent on top of its owner's library." Add a couple of "another"s if you really don't want them doing it when there aren't enough permanents on the board (somehow).
Nice card!
The way Legend names work is that they spell themselves out in full the first time they appear on the card. Second and subsequent occasions, they just use the short name. My substitutions
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are actually smart enough that they do that automatically :)Now this is an OP defender! Repeatable impulse, plus repeatable ground stall! Thalys is designed to make late game decks work by preserving life totals through to the late game, hitting every land drop along the way. And this works with his flavour (kind of), since he's the guy who acts as gatekeeper to all the giant mysteries hidden in the library.
The fact that he's legendary isn't really a problem because I'm going to make a tutor for cards with defender (really hoping to make defender.dec a constructed possibility for this set). Also having four of them isn't that big a deal since you can just impulse them away (I should mention that I changed the impulse effect from 'put them on the bottom of of your library in any order' to 'into the graveyard.' This is to synergize with the reanimation theme in black; also, I had this crazy idea that milling yourself to death should be a real danger for late game decks).
Here's a templating convention I don't know: when you have a legend with a long name, are you allowed to shorten that name in the rules text (from Thalys, Protector of the Architectonic to Thalys)? I could have sworn I saw somewhere recently that this was allowed, but I haven't been able to find any concrete evidence.
I sure do have a lot of trouble making powerful cards. Surveilling Sprite seems so underwhelming to me, and yet I thought Spectral Bookcase had something.
I'm worried that more toughness might work against the card, given that it makes it harder for you to get the draw. How about giving it 1 power so that there's the potential for card advantage (which may disincentivize certain attacks).
Then again, since I'm trying to make a slow set, my 'powerful' cards may still be weak compared to what Wizards is doing. That said, I promise the next defender I make will be OP.
The flavour is certainly amusing :)
The card is interesting. Note that for one more mana you get Surveilling Sprite: i.e. +1/+0, flying, and no defender. (Of course, this is a heck of a lot better if you're bouncing it.) But still, this could probably be buffed slightly - perhaps be a 0/2. See also Psychic Membrane.
This is me trying to make a very strong wall. The walls I've made so far don't justify the defender theme I'm trying to develop, but this one starts to make it look attractive. I'd say it's on par (or at any rate, not that far from) wall of omens. Maybe that's too strong for Blue, but I'm going to give it a shot anyway.
The intended flavour of the card is this: its caster sticks a bookcase in front of a bunch of attacking goblins. They knock it down immediately, but it slows them down a little. Afterward, the caster gets to read the books that fell out (that is, draw a card).
Thanks for the templating help. I suspected something was off, but I had no idea how to fix it. And of course, I always forget the 'enchant creature'.
fixed thanks to L2iOnOk7
The flavor is definitely blue, even if the abilities aren't, really.
This should read "Enchant creature. When CARDNAME enters the battlefield, tap enchanted creature. Enchanted creature doesn't untap during its controller's untap step. Enchanted creature is indestructible."
Possibly all of those should go on separate lines. Icky. Still, I like the flavor quite a bit.