Original card: Timmerian Fiends

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• Moved from rare to uncommon.
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• Activation cost reduced by .
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• Removed ante functionality. Changed ability to "I'mma Steal Artifact, unless you let me Tome Scour then Ashen Powder you."
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• Increased power and toughness by +1/+1.
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Straight up? I like ante in a limited environment. But obviously, we can't have nice things because someone will break them, so we can't have ante.

This card is trying to do something very funny. Black can't destroy/gain control of artifacts. But a card that let's the opponent choose to lose their precious artifact because they might lose something better? That's just mean. And maybe it's Black.

So, I tried to keep that functionality. And since we were playing with graveyards already, I gave an option between a Super-Ashen Powder or Steal Artifact. Strong, but often weak, since your opponent is in control.

On the plus side, between this and the improved Reef Pirates, blue black has a mill strategy in draft. So that's cute. Do you cut your Clockwork Steed if you know your opponent is playing the fiends?

Also, name should have two 'm's in it. Not sure if the two modes should say the word 'You' in front of them. I don't know if that makes it any less confusing. Maybe I should have repeated "artifact's controller" in the first mode.

­Library of Lat-Nam suggests that the modes would be clearer with a "you" prefix.

The second mode is confusing because it's slightly mistemplated: when a target is referred to the second time, cards say "that artifact" rather than "target artifact" (which would indicate the card could target two different artifacts).

I also suggest you swap the order of the modes, so that the bit that refers to the artifact is closer to the original choice of the target.

Ooh. Hmm. At one point you say "that opponent", but actually, as currently written this can target one of your own artifacts, as a sideways Zombify. That probably needs rephrasing. In fact, there's also the annoying niggle that this wording uses modal templating, but the "mode" is only chosen on resolution. So in fact, this shouldn't use bullets at all. Trying out a couple of wordings:

> , Sacrifice ~: Choose target artifact an opponent controls. That player puts the top five cards of their library into their graveyard. Then you put a creature card from that player's graveyard onto the battlefield under your control, unless that player has you gain control of that artifact.

> , Sacrifice ~: Choose target artifact an opponent controls. That player puts the top five cards of their library into their graveyard. Then you gain control of that artifact, unless that player has you put a creature card [of your choice] from their graveyard onto the battlefield under your control.

Thank, Alex. One of those two should do much better.